CK Lynn

Thanks for the crits!

Okay, first, if its a haiku, SAY THAT! at the beginning so you don't end up with a bunch of people thinking that you just don't know how to write. ...

Its really intesene. I really didn't like the rhyme, though, I thought it made the piece a little less real.

I liked this, but you should put a warning on it that says that no one should read immediatley after reading your story "We All Fall Down" Where this was ...

...........Wow. I read part one, but didn't critque it. Instead I said I'd read part 2 and get the rest of the story. And that's all I can say. Wow. ...

Hmmm...not sure if this turned out exactly like I wanted it too, but I still like it. There is She, Who speaks of fire, Dreams of stars. She, With a ...

It's not really a poem, but I liked it. The way you discribed the colors was really different. I liked the title, too.

Okay, we've all had really stupid writing assignments in school at sometome or another, right? Post your worst (or top two) here. Mine is: Make a list of every way ...

I really liked it. Sounds like a cool story. I would like alittle more background, though. The one thing that I didn't like was when Coal said "Then why do ...

I really liked the overall theme and language of this piece. Very nice! However, the fourth line just didn't work. It broke the rythmn you had up until then. Also, ...

I liked it a lot. Though the line "I wasted all my time treading the edge" somehow doesn't fit with the rest of the piece.

This was very interesting. I liked the kind of ryhthm to it.

What about a degree in English? That could open up jobs like English teacher, book editor...

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I really liked it. Although in most poems ryhming makes it sound silly, it really works here.